Reasonably good variety of shots, angles and movement.
A clear sequence is built up through the use of dialogue, match on action and movement of the main character.
Overall this is a little weak, I feel there could be more elements to this, the actual action is limited, with a heavy reliance on opening cinematics. However does look like a film opening and not a trailer!
There are some conventions of horror/thriller, especially the location, the subject etc. But some more tension would help improve this.
In order to improve:
- Think about adding another element to the film (e.g. a person at the other end of the phone, another location etc)
- Add Titles and institutional logo
- Fix sound problems
- Possibly remove some of the 'Max' calls
- Add SFX to increase tension, but do not add music throughout as this is a convention of trailers not film openings.
- Get some more feedback from peers and parents etc and add that to your own post.
- embed the first cut onto your blog.
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